托福寫作格式:開頭空幾個字符
托福寫作格式:開頭空幾個字符?相信大家都很關(guān)注這個問題。那么下面小編就來解答一下!
托福寫作格式:開頭空幾個字符?
格式有兩種,一種是開頭空兩格,另一種是開頭不空格,每段結(jié)束后空一行,推薦第二種,因為看上去分段更加清晰
托福作文:深度分析高分寫作的關(guān)鍵要素
下面給大家看一位寫作21分的同學(xué)寫的獨立作文,這是新東方首考班寫作真題中的一篇習(xí)作。附上老師對這篇作文的批(吐)改(槽),已更正部分低級拼寫錯誤,其他原文呈現(xiàn)。
獨立作文題目
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Students now are more interested in politics than those in the past.
With the globalization of the whole world(萬能開頭稍顯弱,還有whole world這種畫蛇添足的詞匯,難道后面要分part world寫?), politics are playing a more important role nowadays, both domestically and internationally. Thus, I agree that students have more interests in this area than those in the past for two reasons.
First, the advanced technology, such as high-speed Internet, multi-media and smart mobile phone(什么是smart mobile phone,難道有smart phone不能mobile嗎?), allows more students access to the politics events. The technology lay an essential foundament(是foundation吧) for students to keep in touch with those activities. For example, the presidency competition between Hiliton and Trump is getting more dramatic. Lots students(Lots是敗筆) would watch the TV argument between them by phone, portable computer(什么是portable computer,專業(yè)一點就是laptop和ipad吧) and so on(等等等等……考官看中國考生文章會出現(xiàn)無數(shù)so on,審美疲勞有沒有). They could even(上下句之間有even的遞進關(guān)系嗎,不明顯) watch the live program as they are waiting for a bus, share their opinions on the internet while they are in the washroom and hear the speech in their car driving home. Therefore, the convincing efficiency and entertainment attract more and more(這篇作文good肯定是沒戲了) students to focus on this politic event. However, students in the past even don't know how to watch the program(神轉(zhuǎn)折,腦子里想的和表達出來的完全不是一個意思,過去的孩子怎么就不知道看電視節(jié)目了!他們又不是弱智!是沒電視節(jié)目看!是沒方便的途徑!是However, students in the past lack the plentiful sources to approach politics compared with their counterparts nowadays的意思對伐).
Moreover, the more open, transparent and friendly(堆這么多形容詞……哎!請注意言之有物!) politic atmosphere provide a great chance for modern students to got involved(時態(tài)錯了) in these politic activities. Take China for an example(有這種慣用表達嗎,我們不是莎士比亞), students beyond 18 years old have the right to vote for political members, like chairman of the students union, which were used to be nominated by school in the past without permitting students to decide who they support and are supposed to be chairman(親,這么長一句話知道自己在寫什么嗎?扣分句). This right just inspire the student to choose their own president(這么草草收尾,這論證有點意識流啊!).
In a conclusion, the advanced equipments and the openess to ordinary studentsthe bring more students to join in the politic events(這什么意思?什么叫openess to ordinary students?難道還有special students?是不是想說More students are willing to talk about even participate in political events by the help of advanced technologies and increasing civic attitudes toward politics.).
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這篇習(xí)作拿到托??荚囍?,很難達到GOOD要求,通俗講就是 " 親,不談?wù)撟C邏輯,不扯思維深度,就是語言,哥讀的有點累啊,有地方要腦補啊,很多句子連不上啊!"
那么一篇good標準的獨立文章長什么樣?還是以該題目為例,不改變上文的立場,不顛覆上文邏輯,盡量保持思維角度的一致性,僅從語言和論證嚴謹度來修改一下,計時創(chuàng)作一篇。
An intriguing phenomenon occurring on and around campus nowadays is that students are more interested in politics than ever before. It is frequent to hear students talking about Obama Care or the latest Presidential Campaign in the United States when dinning in the cafeteria ,say like, Havard or MIT nowadays.
To elaborate, technological advancements improve the readiness of politic access. In the past, society communicates in the form of letters, newspapers and radios with comparatively low efficiency and little convenience. For example, huge political events in China like the escape of once vice-president Lin Biao would not have gotten the attention of American students until many days even weeks later after VOA or CNN have broadcasted it. Even those American students have noticed the incredible political event from newspaper or radio, they have no source to check all the details from Chinese students or friends due to the information barrier between the two countries. In addition, students in the past only shape their perspectives on a political event through authority publications, causing bias in viewing the issue. However, students today can capture every piece of information, political and non-political, just at the time it goes on even on the other side of the globe and receive multiply sources of opinions from government perspective to public statements by the help of the internet, the invention of smart phones and other mobile devices, thanks to the advancement of multi-media technology. These new equipments connecting by the internet makes a strong and close relationship -- "Information Globalization"-- which shattered info barriers and make even the tiniest voice matter. For example, recently in China there is a breaking news that the wife of ChongQing city's mayor, Bo Gukailai, has been prosecuted for causing the death of a British businessman in Beijing. In the past, these "higher class" news will be soon concealed by authorities. But now, students from all over the country can learn about the event only a few hours after "rumors" spread quickly through Wechat or Weibo which left no room for public authority to "hide" any truth but to make a formal announcement and explain the situation.
Also, the spirit of democracy is indeed growing its power not only in developed countries like US but also in developing countries like China even in undeveloped areas. Chinese students are under great supervision and monitoring in the past. As a result, college students are not permitted to talk about political figures or discuss central government policies. Of course, you can "whisper" in the dark, but you know the influence for that. But now, students are free to claim their thoughts about anything and everything even expressing very extreme ideas about politics on the internet just by click a "send" button in Wechat or any similar social APP. At least from what I know, nobody is getting arrested by talking or discussing politics which is so called "the forbidden zone" in the past.
Admittedly, students in schools have little social experiences and usually come up with unrealistic conclusions or solutions about social problems or political events. But it doesn't hurt much to allow students to show bigger interest about it. After all, who rules the next century is always an issue of time, so encouraging students to enroll and learn politics is probably a question of "sooner rather than later" which might be a better way to look at it.
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當(dāng)我們回頭去思考托福寫作如何獲得高分滿分的時候?
Is it about the template you would use in test? Is it about fancy words you paraphrase in article? Or is it about something meaningful with correct vocabulary and precise expression throughout the writing? In a word, make sure what you've written MAKES SENSE and let the scorer feel EFFORTLESSwhen glimpsing it through!
高分寫作不完全靠背模板,也不完全是抄范文(當(dāng)然這些都有幫助),真正的高分滿分托福作文要 " 多讀書多看報少吃零食多睡覺 "。
寫作和口語不能閉門造車瞎逼練,否則會永遠犯同樣的錯誤,建議各位考生要么背誦地道的英文詞句表達,要么找托??谡Z寫作老師陪練(主要是修改習(xí)作),這些反饋可能比寫多少“機經(jīng)”都重要,至少節(jié)省鉆進死胡同重復(fù)犯錯的時間!
托福寫作簡單好用的高分句型:平行結(jié)構(gòu)
我們首先來欣賞一下美國的約翰·F·肯尼迪總統(tǒng)所說過的一段話:
Let every nation know, whether it wishes us well or ill, that we shall pay any price, bear any burden, meet any hardship, support any friend, oppose any foe to assure the survival and success of liberty.
這段文字中,所有動詞和賓語的形式都是一致的,語言簡潔而有力度。
這種將兩個或者兩個以上的成分用相同的語言結(jié)構(gòu)表達在英語中稱為平行結(jié)構(gòu)(Parallelism)。這種結(jié)構(gòu)不但結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊,而且語言優(yōu)美,甚至可以包含豐富的情感和風(fēng)格,不但在演說中經(jīng)常使用,而且在任何英文考試中,都可以成為提高句子質(zhì)量和表達水平的終極武器。相反,有些同學(xué)的句子很長,使用了從句、非謂語等各種復(fù)雜語法,如果結(jié)構(gòu)松散,讓人難以理清頭緒,也不會被考官視為優(yōu)質(zhì)句子。
其實絕大多數(shù)中國學(xué)生其實都不擅長寫平行句式,這是完全可以理解的。
畢竟除了詩歌和對聯(lián),中文在大多數(shù)情況下都對結(jié)構(gòu)是否平行沒有特殊要求,我們依照松散的中文句子翻譯出來的英文也就很難做到平行了。
" 高校企業(yè)參與了這個神器的新工具的創(chuàng)造,確保了它的融資,并花費時間時產(chǎn)品投放市場。" 從中文的角度,幾乎是沒有毛病的。
但是直接翻譯成英文可能就變成了這個樣子:The high school entrepreneur was involved in the creation of a new miracle tool, secured financing for it, and spent time getting the product to market. 這個句子中,"創(chuàng)造"、"融資"和"推廣" 都是由學(xué)校這個主體發(fā)出,最終對象都是 "新工具" 的動作。
因此我們可以將它改成這樣的平行結(jié)構(gòu):The high school entrepreneur created, financed, and marketed the new miracle tool. 這個句子的修改過程,首先是要有意識地使用平行結(jié)構(gòu),其次是在中文上就對語序作出調(diào)整,最后是明確可以并列的成分,也就是動詞。
除了以上的動詞,介詞、連詞和冠詞也經(jīng)常能引導(dǎo)平行成分。
我們常用的both ... and、either ... or、neither ... nor和not only ... but also也可以用來連接平行結(jié)構(gòu),使用時要特別注意前后的結(jié)構(gòu)是否完全平行。
接下來讓我們一起用幾個句子改錯來練平行結(jié)構(gòu):
1、 許多年從業(yè)人員面臨兩難問題;工作時為了金錢還是樂趣?
原句:A dilemma facing many young professionals is whether to work for money or work for enjoyment.
平行版:A dilemma facing many young professionals is whether to work for money or to work for enjoyment.
2、這對于勝利者和那些輸?shù)舻娜藖碚f都是一個問題。
原句:This could be a problem for both the winners and those who lose.
平行版:This could be a problem for both the winners and the losers.
3、奧林匹克志愿者們做好準備、完全有能力、下定決心圓滿完成任務(wù)。
原句:Olympic volunteers were ready, filly able, and were quite determined to do a great job.
平行版:Olympic volunteers were ready, able, and determined to do a great job.
4、學(xué)生可以登陸Facebook,花時間閱讀郵件,瀏覽一些博客推送,然后開心地發(fā)微博。
原句:Students can log onto Facebook, spend time reading email messages, review some blog posts, and then tweet with joy.
平行版:Students can check Facebook, read email messages, review blog posts, and then joyfully send tweets.
以上基本的平行結(jié)構(gòu)大家是否都掌握了呢?
在托福作文中,有很多可以使用平行結(jié)構(gòu)的地方。尤其是進行過程描述或者同時提出多個細節(jié)時,試著把多個動作用同樣的形式表達出來,一定會給考官留下思路清晰、語言簡潔的好印象。同學(xué)們不妨一試。
托福備考范文:痛苦經(jīng)歷對將來的價值
托??荚囎魑念}目:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer.
托福考試作文參考分析:
舉一些例子支持題目中的觀點,確實有些痛苦經(jīng)歷對將來毫無幫助。
托??荚囎魑姆段膮⒖迹?/p>
Some people argue that most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time can later become valuable experiences. I cannot agree with them more. There are numerous reasons why I hold confidence on this opinion, and I would explore only a few primary ones here.
Difficulties are beneficial to our personal growth. In the course of our life, we will face numerous difficulties, and each difficulty will help us grow up, and become a valuable lesson for the future. A toddler fells off the ground for many times before he knows how to walk, and a child learns how to swim after he drinks water in the swimming pool. In addition, only after we experienced failures, we know the value of success. We will never appreciate anything that comes so easy. Difficulties can make us feel stronger and be more confident for the future obstacles.
Furthermore, difficulties in our work can help us gain more experience and knowledge. Most of the times we can gain knowledge and experiences faster through experiencing difficulties in our life and trying to find a solutions to the perplexities that we face. There is a famous saying, "no pain no gain." For example, when we take on a new job that we do not have much experience in, the first few weeks can be extremely painful and we may feel enormous pressure and difficulties. And we will try our best to adjust, to learn and to think, how to do this job better. The more difficulties we feel, the harder we try to acquire the skills and knowledge to overcome it. Learning and this stage is extremely efficient and our problem solving skills well increase. After we overcome more and more problems, we can become an experienced worker in this field and will be able to take on more challenges. We will never fear that we will face the same kind of problem again. This means that we have accumulated valuable experiences for the future.
In a word, a difficult experience is a gift that life gives us. We should appreciate it and take it as a precious opportunity to gain knowledge and experience about our study, work and life.
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