怎樣使英語文章有亮點(diǎn)
怎樣使英語文章有亮點(diǎn)
NMET書面表達(dá)評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)“最高檔”要求：“應(yīng)用了較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯;語法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯方面有少許錯(cuò)誤，但為盡力使用較復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)或較高級(jí)詞匯所致;有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。”從歷年書面表達(dá)高分文章來看，每篇文章都有“亮”點(diǎn)，即在用詞、造句或段落安排上都有獨(dú)到之處。下面是小編為您收集整理的怎樣使英語文章有亮點(diǎn)，供大家參考!
怎樣使英語文章有亮點(diǎn)
要想獲得高分就應(yīng)在“正確”表達(dá)的基礎(chǔ)上寫出自己的特色，寫出自己的“亮”點(diǎn)。
一、詞匯選擇——標(biāo)新立異
在寫作中“較高級(jí)詞匯”的使用主要是指使用《大綱》上沒有的詞語、使用通過構(gòu)詞法變化來的新詞、使用同(近)義詞或反義詞等來代替常見詞語。
1)這棟房子在芳草街的一棟樓上。
A: The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street.
B: The flat situates in a building on Fangcao Street.
分析:is in是常見詞語，而situates in則是《大綱》上沒有的，屬于高級(jí)詞匯。
2)在周末我們做很多作業(yè)。
A: At weekends, we have a lot of homework to do.
B: At weekends, we have endless homework to do.
分析:B句在表達(dá)時(shí)沒有使用過于直接的a lot of，而是使用了endless。endless就是由《大綱》詞匯end加后綴-less變化來的。
3)洗澡間和廚房都很好。
A: The bathroom and the kitchen are good.
B. The bathroom and the kitchen are well-furnished.
在表達(dá)要點(diǎn)時(shí)，B句使用了well furnished,這比good語氣強(qiáng)，也顯得生動(dòng)。
在造句時(shí),“較高級(jí)詞匯”如能運(yùn)用貼切自然，哪怕整篇文章只用上一個(gè)，也會(huì)使你的作文顯示出與眾不同。
二、結(jié)構(gòu)造句——與眾不同
在造句時(shí),既要使句子生動(dòng)，又要使其簡(jiǎn)明扼要。
1、使用與人不同的表達(dá)方式，特別是提倡打破漢語句子結(jié)構(gòu)的束縛而重組的句子更受歡迎。
1)唐山曾在二十世紀(jì)八十年代發(fā)生過一次大地震。
A: There was a strong earthquake in Tangshan in the 1980s.
B: A terrible earthquake hit/struck Tangshan in the 1980s.
大多數(shù)同學(xué)使用了there be結(jié)構(gòu)，這是對(duì)的，但是B句卻摒棄了常見句式。另辟蹊徑而使用了“主語+謂語+賓語”結(jié)構(gòu)，且使用了terrible,hit/strike這樣的詞匯，更是難能可貴的。
2)你八月十五日的來信我今天早晨收到了。
A:I received your letter which was written on August 15th this morning.(多數(shù)人使用的方式)
B: Your letter of August 15th reached/ got to me this morning.(與多數(shù)人使用的方式不同,簡(jiǎn)潔)
2.使用一些強(qiáng)勢(shì)句式，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句、感嘆句、倒裝句等，增強(qiáng)語句的表現(xiàn)力。如：
3)阿福救了我妹妹。
A: Ah Fu saved my sister.(一般句式)
B: It was Ah Fu that saved my sister.(強(qiáng)調(diào)句式)
4)我們看到莊稼和蔬菜長(zhǎng)勢(shì)喜人很是高興。
A: We were glad to see crops and vegetables growing well.(一般陳述句)
B: How glad we were to see crops and vegetables growing well.(感嘆句)
3、句式多樣,復(fù)雜得體。在寫作中應(yīng)避免使用相同長(zhǎng)度的相同句型，而應(yīng)注意句式的變化，如長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，簡(jiǎn)單句、并列句與復(fù)合句共用，還可使用簡(jiǎn)化句等;一些較復(fù)雜的結(jié)構(gòu)如獨(dú)立主格，分詞結(jié)構(gòu)等也可使用。下面的表達(dá)中A句簡(jiǎn)單句多，而且多處使用there be結(jié)構(gòu)，顯得單調(diào)、乏味，而B句就有自己的特色(請(qǐng)同學(xué)們自己分析)。
5)這是一套25平方米的住房，住房里面有臥室、有洗澡間、有廚房;臥室里有床、沙發(fā)、桌子和椅子等。
A: It's a flat of 25 square metres. There is a bedroom in the flat. There is a bathroom and a kitchen in it, too. In the bedroom, there is a bed; there is a sofa, a desk and a chair as well.
B: It's a flat of 25 square metres, with a bedroom, a bathroom and a kitchen. In the bedroom there is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair.
三、布局謀篇——獨(dú)具匠心
在寫作中，我們可按時(shí)間、空間或其它邏輯順序來安排各要點(diǎn)，同時(shí)為使主題突出,結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，我們應(yīng)注意學(xué)習(xí)和使用交代句以及段落的主題句等。在布局謀篇上，NMET2002范文堪稱典范。請(qǐng)看：
Opinions are divided on the question.
60% of the students are against the idea of entrance fees. They believe a public park should be free of charge. People need a place where they can rest and enjoy themselves. Charging entrance fees will no doubt keep some people away. What is more, it will become necessary to build gates and walls, which will do harm to the appearance of a city.
On the other hand, 40% think that fees should be charged because you need money to pay gardens and other workers, and to buy plants and young trees. They suggested, however, fees should be charged low.
1)該文使用Opinions are divided...作交代句，開門見山，隨后兩個(gè)段落均使用了主題句(見黑體字部分)，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，表達(dá)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)。
2)在表述要點(diǎn)時(shí)范文還對(duì)要點(diǎn)出場(chǎng)順序作了調(diào)整，如“40%的同學(xué)認(rèn)為應(yīng)收門票，但不宜過高?！鼻安糠肿鳛橹黝}句放在句首，而后部分另起一句放在句末：They suggested, however, fees should be charged low.這樣就分清了輕重緩急，主題突出，條理清楚。
3)范文使用了and, what is more, however等連詞，在段落之間使用了on the other hand(說明前后兩個(gè)觀點(diǎn)是相悖的)，這些連接手段的運(yùn)用加強(qiáng)了句子之間、段落之間的聯(lián)系，使文章表達(dá)連貫，渾然一體。
4)范文在第二段為說明不收門票的“原因”時(shí)增加了Charging entrance fees will no doubt keep some people away.等細(xì)節(jié)，這也是解決句與句之間缺少連貫性的常見方法。
總之，要想使自己的文章有亮點(diǎn)，吸引讀者，在考試中獲得高分，就應(yīng)在用詞、造句、謀篇上下功夫，哪怕是有一處特長(zhǎng)都是“亮”點(diǎn)，都是值得肯定的。
國(guó)慶節(jié)外出旅游初中英語作文
We take a holiday of 7 days because of the National Day.As we all know，October 1 is the National Day of China in Gregorian calendar.
In the holiday I went to visit the Yellow River Forest Park togeter with three of my classmates.It was very boring when staying in the bus for a long time，which made me doze off all the time，and at some time，I nearly struck my head on the chair in the front of me.After two hours' journery by bus，we finally got to the park.But to my disappoint，there was nothing intresting here，which were quiet normal things.Compared with the my school I stayed in，here was very noisy and messy.
Though the park is beside the Yellow River，the air is still a little smelly because there are a lot of animals such as horses，cocks and so on here，which make lots of wastes every day while few people clean them.In a word，the park is not so good as I had expected，and I felt unsatisfied about it.